Is it difficult to understand what I'm looking for (If so then tell me and I'll explain more thoroughly)? You still have not addressed the majority of the issues I pointed out.
But you haven't done what I asked you to do. The climb is still as long as it was (It's a bit different, and a bit better like this, but the length is still the same). The risk of falling back down again is still very present, and I'm not sure if there's enough time. You also have to capitalize the first letter of the title.
That big climb is far too long, it just gets too repetitive and too boring. I don't really think that you should make a challenge out of not falling back down again either. Doing that is very frustrating for the player.